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On Fri, 23 Apr 1999, FFlores wrote:

> Let me propose this short story for Julio Cort=E1zar,
> in the original Spanish version, plus interlinear glosses.
> Not really that different from English, but...

[...]

> Well, this should be easy...=20

Well, I had to make up a lot of words, even "sun" (I did have "star",
"moon" and "planet") and there was one very awkward sentence in it.
But here it is in Valdyan.

> Maybe later I'll give you
> some Drasel=E9q :)

Yes! Please! I like these things, they generate a lot of words about
subjects that I don't think of writing about when I write something
original (I'm working on a creation myth and another folk song).


DYSTEIN LAYSEN

Mustinin airenan rastenan imochi chanie rythat, falan so iranisin
rani. Mastien lien airenan hestynat so lysat. Cyne vurie lushean
gylat lea dunli fulin le chazies falien hine gulynayt. Hanii arani
airenen le denayt. Tamustyn cynat lea airenan le bysat nerien,
tamustin ili ruyen len le denayt. Hanreni besh can falan rastenan
imochi chanie rythat, airenan so iranisin rani. Cyne airenan lushean
hyrna gylat; rastin seani cush ruyen len le denayt. Chanie falan chan
mornat lea airenein lea nalayen lhenat mustin le duzenat. Havin
rhyzat ni falan so ruyen len na le denenat. Mastien airenan hestynat
so lysat. Veryen falan rathe tylsean lasat masten airenein so farat.
Donat lei so chalynat. Lea nysat mustinan airenein. Gyrn chylat.


dystein         laysen
of-wall.hanging subject
"Subject of a wall-hanging"

Woven or embroidered wall-hangings are very common in Valdyas,
especially in the north where it's cold, and Rizenay (the
northernmost town of the country) is famous for them. Many
wall-hangings depict historical scenes.


mustinin airenan rastenan imochi chanie rythat
of-army  ruler   persons  eighty only   leads
"The general leads only eighty people"


falan so  iranisin rani
enemy and hundreds fifty
"and the enemy five thousand."

There's no "thousand" as a separate numeral in Valdyan; "one
thousand" is _iranisin iran_ "ten hundred".=20


mastien lien    airenan hestynat so  lysat
in-tent his.own ruler   curses   and weeps
"In his tent the general curses and weeps."

Now it's established what the _airenan_ is ruler of, we don't need
"of the army" any more. _Hestyna_ "to say a quick prayer" is
generally used for "to take the name of a god in vain".=20


cyne      vurie    lushean gylat =20
presently inspired message writes
"Then, being inspired, he writes a message."

Not the proclamation, but the general is inspired, because _vurie_
"divinely inspired" can only apply to people. I could have juggled
participles, but that would give a very archaic flavour that I don't
want here.=20


lea dunli   fulin    le chazhes  falien   hine  gulynayt
REL pigeons bringers it on-abode on-enemy above they.drop
"Carrier pigeons drop it above the enemy camp."

_Chazhas_ means "a place where someone is", especially a temporary
dwelling-place.


hanii        arani       airenen  le denayt
adolescents  two.hundred to-ruler they-go
"Two hundred boys go [over] to the general."

I thought at first that _infantes_ might mean "infantrymen", but my
mother-in-law (who knows Spanish) consulted her dictionary and
confirmed the meaning as "children". As I can't conceive of 200
*small* kids in an army, I translated it as _hanii_ "adolescents,
boys" (in their early teens). _Le dena_ "to go (to)" is reflexive in
Valdyan like in Spanish, "to put oneself".


tamustyn   cynat   lea airenan le bysat nerien
DIM.battle follows REL ruler   it wins  easily
"A small battle follows, which the general wins easily."


tamustin   ili ruyen         len    le denayt
DIM.armies two to-right.side to-his they.go
"Two regiments go [over] to his side."

_Tamustin_ can mean a city militia or a regiment maintained by a noble
house; as Valdyas has no standing army, these groups make up the army
in times of war. As "army" is a collective plural it can't be
pluralized again, but _ili_ "two" is enough to determine it. _Ruyen_
"right side" (as opposed to "left side", not "wrong side") is the
usual way of expressing "being on someone's side" as well as
"standing at someone's side".


hanreni besh  can   falan rastenan imochi chanie rythat
days    three after enemy persons  eighty only   leads
"After three days the enemy leads only eighty people"


airenan so  iranisin rani.
ruler   and hundreds fifty
"and the general five thousand."


cyne      airenan lushean hyrna gylat =20
presently ruler   message other writes
"Then the general writes another message."

(meaning "a different message", not "one more message")


rastin  seani   cush ruyen         len    le denayt
persons seventy nine to-right.side to-his they.go
"Seventy-nine people go [over] to his side."


chanie falan chan mornat  lea airenein lea nalayen      lhenat =20
only   enemy one  remains REL of-ruler REL not.speaking waits =20

mustin le  duzenat=20
army   him has-surrounded

"Only one enemy remains, whom the army of the general who waits
without speaking has surrounded."

There must be a less complex way of doing this in Valdyan, but I'm
still working on word order; the above is awkward, but grammatically
correct.


havin rhyzat ni  falan so  ruyen         len    na  le denenat
night passes NEG enemy and to-right.side to-his NEG he.has.gone
"The night passes and the enemy has not gone [over] to his side."

The verbal negation _na_ is required, _ni_ is optional when the subject
is negated, but is used here to give emphasis: all the others went over
to the general, but not this one.=20


mastien airenan hestynat so  lysat.
in-tent ruler   curses   and weeps in-tent
"In the tent the general curses and weeps."

I put "in [the] tent" here instead of "in his (own) tent" to shift the
emphasis to the general. We already know that it's the general's tent,
after all.


veryen  falan rathe  tylsean lasat
at-dawn enemy slowly sword   pulls
"At dawn the enemy slowly draws his sword"


masten  airenein so  farat.
to-tent of-ruler and goes-to
"and goes to the general's tent."


donat  lei so  chalynat
enters him and looks-at
"He enters and looks at him."


lea nysat    mustinan airenein
is-sent-away army     of-ruler=20
"The general's army disbands."

My first effort had _mustin airenein vilat_ "the general's army falls
apart" but _vila_ implies complete disintegration or destruction;
there is no army any more, whatever the cause. _Lea nysat_ conveys
the impression that the individual soldiers go away.


gyrn chylat.
sun  appears
"The sun rises."


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